Bare like a rug
A time in your life when you just want to give up
The only way to comunicate is threw sound
No one cares about eyes, how you feel, or your look
Everyones the same but different too
The only way to distiguish if it is you
Your black which means death and heartless at times
But who says that...I save the night
To go across the world and to determine our fates that is my job to get rid of your fate
The red running down your skin like a heart all vibrant and alive now dead
Red resembles love and peace and happiness.....and all who see me see death and distruction
So i resemble life as a whole so full of life able to file miles
But at the same time blood rushes to my head and at that moment i fall dead but when i awake in the dark of night the blood rushes bak for me to take flight, i resemble america and people in the world able to ambitious and fly on top of the world to kill anything in my past but my real food is that of a bats
So think of me as your freind im there when you want me and gone in a flash to hear my call you need ears like a dog r to come out at night and see me in flight
I help the world by growing life and keeping it safe for everyday life, im excluded from all and shunned in most parts but if you get to know me im really quite nice.
4 comments:
i whent to the zoo and wrote this i just started typing its really bad i know i need to change it alot but well im sre you can get the overall messgage i jsut need to be inspred i could write just i need something to make me write so ya its pretty bad i think.
i like it a lot its different in a good way, r u basically describing a bat?, them being nocturnal maybe even a vampire bat w/ the blood refrences, i think its good real good, do some editing here and there and its fine, its not bad at all dont doubt ur self, wat did u say in ur last post train ur brain to get past the flaws u think this poem has, ur not having writers block train ur brain more. Anyways long comment im tired school 2 moro why the hell am I still up.
i think its really cool. its not just your typical rhyming poem- its different. and different is good!
Nice job! wow I am very much impressed! I have never been able to fully understand poetry but I LOVE this poem because its very rich and full of color and emotion- GREAT job!
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